fic: temptation (ffvii)

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LSKJFDSKDFJ;EWOIF CRISIS CORE OMFGYAY.  Zack is such a dumbapple.  *dies*

Lesson learned for the week: never play Crisis Core right before a phil class.  Because we started talking about Adam and original sin and this was all I could think of the whole time.  XD

Temptation
R; Sephiroth/Zack/Cloud
How the Book of Genesis really should have gone.

Because Aeris is God.  *laughs herself silly*

EDIT:  Minor editing for pronoun confusion, and the above link now takes you to IJ where, in the face of LJ's slow death, I'm going to start moving all my shit.  Sorry for the inconvenience.

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Icon related XDD

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“Did it work?” Cloud asked him, brows still furrowed in a frown as he leaned forward to lick him again. The angel quickly grabbed him by the shoulders.



“What are you doing?” he demanded.



Scowling, Cloud replied very slowly, as though speaking to the goldfish with the three-second memory, “When Zack licked me, it made me laugh, and you’re still being mean.”

This part killed me. XDDD

You left out words, particularly in the beginning, so I'd go back and comb through the first few paragraphs.

It gets vague in a few places as to who's speaking, but other than that wonderfully written and it made me giggle like mad. XD Zack is so a little imp and Aerith is totally God. :3

Re: Icon related XDD

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Thanks for the intel. When I can sit down for more than a few minutes and really look through it, I'll fix it as best I can.

Thank you. ^^